In-Class Activities and Notes for May 4
May 3rd, 2005Editing Your Prose
In the final stages of the grant writing process, it’s time to edit your prose for conciseness and clarity as well as proofreading your prose to remove errors. Here are some guidelines to help you do so.
Editing for Conciseness and Clarity
In grant writing, like most professional writing, you want your sentences to be concise and clear. This does not necessarily mean that you write short sentences; it means that you have carefully chosen your words and arranged them in order to precisely convey meaning.
In general, it’s easier to write a first draft to get ideas on paper and to then refine your sentences for conciseness and clarity.
Ways to Edit for Conciseness
(From Conciseness: Methods of Eliminating Wordiness)
1. Eliminate unnecessary determiners and modifiers (kind of, sort of, basically, for all intents and purposes, actually, generally, literally).
Basically, the agency has for all intents and purposes been forced to literally close its doors.
The agency has been forced to close its doors.
2. Change phrases into single words where possible.
The students showing the best performance will be encouraged in the presentation of their research at a conference.
The best students will be encouraged to present their research at a conference.
3. Change unnecessary that, who, and which clauses into phrases when possible. (Sometimes, however, they are necessary!)
Our agency, which recently won an award for service to the community, strives to help people that are less fortunate.
Our agency, which recently won a community service award, strives to help the less fortunate.
4. Avoid overusing expletives at the beginning of sentences. (It is or There are constructions)
There are four guidelines that will be followed in determining who qualifies for aid.
Four guidelines will be followed to determine who qualifies for aid.
5. Use active rather than passive verbs. (Passive voice can be used if you need or want to mask the subject, but active voice is preferable in most cases.)
The budget was checked for accuracy. (By whom?)
The agency’s accountant checked the budget for accuracy.
6. Avoid overusing noun forms of verbs.
The focus of the agency’s mission is the eradication of poverty.
The agency focuses on eradicating poverty.
7. Reword unnecessary infinitive phrases
The duties of the lifeguards will be to monitor the pool and to inform people of behavior violations.
Lifeguards will monitor the pool and inform people of behavior violations.
8. Replace circumlocutions with direct expressions
Owing to the fact that economic hardship has fallen on the county, it is crucial that our agency has the opportunity to stay open in order to serve the many affected people.
Because the county is experiencing economic hardship, our agency must stay open to serve the many affected people.
9. Omit words that explain the obvious or provide excessive detail — if you find passages that explain or describe in detail what would already be obvious to readers, delete or reword them.
It is clear to even the most casual observer that this problem will persist if left unchecked.
This problem will persist if left unchecked.
10. Omit repetitive wording
The agency employs two full-time employees. These employees are responsible for the day-to-day administrative decisions.
The agency employs two full-time employees who are responsible for day-to-day administrative decisions.
Conciseness Exercise
Using the ten recommendations above, go through one of the grant drafts and circle or underline sentences that could be improved by applying one or more of these tips. Re-write the sentences on a separate sheet of paper.
Proofreading for Problems
Even after revising for conciseness, you’ll want to proofread (or ask someone to proofread) your document carefully. When you proofread, you’ll want to pay attention to the following areas:
- Word choice: have you chosen the correct word based on its meaning in the sentence? (Homonym groups such as they’re/there/their/, it’s/its, two/too/too, effect/affect, resident/residence are common mistakes in this category.)
- Comma use and comma abuse: are commas being used to separate introductory phrases and clauses at the beginnings of sentences, to separate items in a series, and to separate compound sentences? Are commas not being used to separate two complete sentences?
- Run-on sentences and sentence fragments. Is each sentence expressing a complete thought? Are two sets of complete thoughts joined with a semi-colon or a conjunction?
- Subject-verb agreement: Does each verb agree in number with its subject?
- Pronouns and antecedents: Does every pronoun have a clear antecedent?
Proofread one of the grant applications and cross out and insert corrections where necessary.